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What a fresh approach, it was almost like reading those english
essays from grade nine, when I used to teach.
You have potential, but your hatred of males has to be toned down, to appeal to an audience broader then a group of misfits from high school.
Yeah, those are the people who complain the most about my stories...I'll keep that in mind while writing the next story.
funny as all hell...
thanks for the laugh
John
Can you tell me where the bathroom is, I feel the need to take a shit!
Howard
It's the second door on your left when you go down the hall.
how can you write erotic stories if you`re asexual? i thought the whole point of erotic literature is to arouse people...funny story though! :)
I like your writing style. Not one wasted word. Funky dialogue. Great sense of humor. Crazy characters. Where'd you get the idea for that bowling-alley motif? Did it come to you in dream? Weird, but entertaining. How about a bowling story where Steve's twin sister gets drunk on too many Mike's Lemonades (that her brother feeds her while bowling), passes out on one of those plastic chairs behind the score-keeping table, and dreams she's being raped by ten bowling pins that anthropomorphically come to life as big black studs with cocks no smaller that 10 inches each? And, of course, a guy named Mike Kowalski rescues her, but she can't remember his name when she wakes up the next day and wants to tell Steve the story of her 10-on-1 rape.
Oddly enough, the idea to have a bowling alley story came to me when I was bowling. Very creative, I know.
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