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I love how you set up the situations for how the sex occurs. It does
seem real and every day. I like how you spend a chapter with no sex to
set up the first encounters with her first few lovers (I'm up to chapter
35 now). It makes the eventual coupling all the more powerful. What
really kills me though is the way you describe the orgasms.
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I'm up to chapter 60 now. I'm really excited because the next chapter
is centered on Cecilia. I can't wait. I love your first time stories
of Laura seducing another woman into the thrills of lesbian love. I like
reading about a woman who so actively pursues straight women
I get a smile when Laura tells her little lies trying to get some
pussy. I hope that doesn't sound crass. I find Laura very endearing.
She feels so much for her lovers. It is not just sex for her. She
is so sexual in nature. I like a woman who will do what is necessary to get
her conquest.
10-22-00
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Like I have said, I just love the vocalizations. Another thing that I
have liked is how you are willing to slowly develop situations. I think
you spent 5 of 6 chapters before Tracy and Laura finally had sex. Then
the way some of the women fight Laura at first and then succumb. I
really liked the way that Sholandra gave her hell. Now that we are
getting more women I'm really happy. Now some of the women are
coming onto her. Another thing I like is seeing new phrases and new
ways of describing a sex scene.
You have been able to keep things from getting boring. With this last
Karen story I was starting to think they were becoming a little
predictable, then you bring up the nipple clamps and the prickly rope
(now that is a new one on me and a little thought provoking). I got
hot. I really enjoyed the sex in the shower and bath. Those were nice
additions and got me hot. Hopefully, I'll be reading more such in
future stories. I liked Kim/Lorrie one chapter stands. You continue
to grow the existing relationships.
I liked the relationship between Rhonda and Laura. First the extreme
biting jealously and the then the hot sex.
11-06-00
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Story 128 made me laugh and also think a little. It is a Sholandra
story. She just kept cursing Laura, which made me laugh a few times. I
love the little spitfire. She raked Laura's arm and drew blood. I can't
blame Sholandra though. I would be furious if I was told by my
current lover that my old lover handed me off to the new one. Makes
for a great story though.
You are so right. All this conflict is what keeps this story so
entertaining. It is all the emotions flowing in these stories that keep
them fresh and a cut above. I have kept wondering if I will stop
enjoying these stories. Will they get old? They haven't yet. I just
have to compliment you again.
11-19-00
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I got up to 150 earlier today. Still digging them tremendously. Laura's total
abandon gets my engine revving. Getting a little more group sex going
which I love, especially with the women. The group sex with the guys
while not my cup of tea is still satisfying when you serve it. I just
love your details of the multiple penetration.
I loved the chapter where Laura and Karen first fisted. I agree that it
is an extremely intimate act, a complete surrender and trusting of one
lover to the other. Plus, it is such an act of giving and receiving.
when Laura and Karen then fisted each other so aggressively, it was like
whoa, need to be careful there. I have often thought that lesbians are
such good lovers because so much of what we do is mental. Doing things
like giving head and fisting, all the pleasure for the giver is from the
act of giving to the partner. Oh well, time to get off the soapbox.
I agree about the single women being very demanding of Laura's time.
What I do love about them is all the jealously they invoke. The married
ones do too, but they have to be much more retrained. I just love it
when the single women give Laura hell for ignoring them to screw
another woman. I agree, you have to phase them out, or limit them, so
you can introduce new women. You are right, for the story to proceed,
new variations are necessary to keep the story fresh.
11-26-00
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I have gotten current with Laura's saga, and I just once more, must
compliment you. This has been a long and glorious trip. As I set here, I
just can't believe how good this story has been. I read another story arc
that had about 40 chapters and it was definitely losing steam at the end.
Laura is still going strong. You said in an earlier email that sex by
definition is repetitive. One has to work to keep it fresh. I have yet to
find a chapter where I didn't feel the sex was scorching. I hope for many
more.
Laura always makes her women feel so special, though, some can't take the
sheer power of Laura's love and lust.
Looking back at all the women Laura has made love to, I can see that you
have crafted many diverse characters. To me, they seem like real people.
They are just not characters that are there to be "fucked". They are real
women who have a life full of hopes, fears and ambitions. They "breath". I
really get a kick out of the spitfires like Jane and Sholandra. I enjoy
their humor and energy. Karen and Earlene with their perversity. Some
are just women in a relationship with Laura. The ones I really enjoy as
characters are the ones who are either cold like Deshona or repressed
like Tamara and especially Ada. When Laura shows them how good sex can
really be, they turn into complete sex gluttons. I'm really attracted to Ada. I
hope she will make some more appearances. The longing phone calls give
me hope. The scene between her and Laura in the shower was simply HOT HOT.
The only scenes that I didn't enjoy as much, were, you probably guessed it,
was the ones with the guys. Just not my cup of tea, especially just Laura
and a guy. Still, the scenes with either multiple men doing Laura, or,
Laura with a woman and a man are scorching. I can't help but enjoy them.
Makes this little lesbian blush. Thinking of multiple partners, hopefully,
Laura will have some multiple women partnering in the not to distant future.
I also, think that your stories are getting better. I can't put my finger
on it, but, they are definitely hotter and more addictive. The stories
themselves just have a great flow to them.
1-27-01
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Then I discovered Nifty and Asstr. At first, I felt like a kid in candy
store. It was just so nice to find literature about lesbians. Most of
it is pretty good. But, after the initial blush, it all started
to seem the same. I enjoy the sex scenes for a lot of them, but I
thought something was missing.
Then I discovered Laura. After I started getting into Laura I started
to see what the problem was. The others story had no heart or soul.
Other stories just setup the story with the normal she was pretty and
had a sweet personality. They can then be broken down between fuck
happy sluts or innocents seduced. The women for the most part are
just cardboard cutouts. The women are just fuck sluts. They are not
"real" to me. The other missing part was no plot. Your story is nothing
but plot driven. You have so many threads running at one time that I am
simply giddy. I can't wait for the next chapter, just so I can see how
Laura and the various women are doing. I want to follow their lives
where all your plot threads take them. I love it.
In a way, Laura has ruined me to other stories. Their glaring
deficiencies are just so readily apparent. As I said, your characters
are real people. I read a few other stories and then read the last Jane story
again to contrast them. The others were okay, but your story simply got
me all steamed up again. Gosh, your sex scenes are just so fucking hot.
What really made the story for me was the little details. Laura's
fear of Jane's crazy driving. Jane's fiery demeanor when caught having
sex. Jane saying "oh Laurrraaaaa" from the shower. These just fit Jane
to the letter. From another one of your characters, it would not have
fit. I just smiled when I came across these each time I read these
chapters. This is what gives the stories so much punch.
There is one other thing that I really like about these stories and that
is you touch on some of a person's darker traits and some moral issues.
With Chanitra's pregnancy you bring up with subtlety, the issues of teen
pregnancy and abortion without hitting a person over the head with it.
From time to time you've mentioned unprotected sex and the dangers of
that in today's world. With Laura herself, she has doubts. Her lying
to her paramours and then the conflict that causes within herself and
her lovers. The way she put pressure on Chanitra in this last chapter.
She almost went to far in pressuring the sweet girl. She backed off,
but still, her moral compass was titled and Laura felt guilt.
2-12-01
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I loved how Laura took her time and slowly broke down Shontay's
defenses. She took it one step at a time. I thought Shontay seemed
remote and thus probably cold in the area of sex. You have showed three
kind of "cold" women. Deshona was bitter because of her divorce, Ada
was messed up because of her RR (religious right) upbringing. Now we
have Shontay who simply has not been satisfied. I feel so sorry for people
who have never experienced great sex. Fortunately, that's something
Shontay will not have to worry about any more. I'm telling you, those
sounds your women make while rutting make me crazy. ;-))
2-20-01
We have been discussing why your erotica is so superior. We have
touched on your characters and how they seem like real people; great
sex; build up of situations; plot development; giving the reader plenty
of detail and other salient points.
But there is one thing else that I think is very important. That is
the concept of "balance". I have read other stories that had elements
of the above paragraph, but had glaring omissions. You have mastered
blending these components together, into stories that are near perfect.
With some stories they're boring because there are no details and no
development, while others make me want to scream, "get on with it." You
truly do have a gift/skill for the writing of erotica.
3-3-01
I must really commend you on your stories again. In the lesbian genre
at least, you are without peer. Your descriptions of lesbian sex leave
me almost breathless sometimes. Your sex scenes are the best, period.
Your sex scenes are so natural and just flow. But it is the little
details like how you describe the aureole stippling up in arousal. It
is how you describe in various chapters how Laura's women hands clutch
the bed sheets, elbows dig into the bed, fingers claw their thighs. It
is these details that send it over the top.
I have been thinking some more as to why your stories are so good. Once
more I think balance is a good word. You are able to give the reader
great sex and yet you able to set up scenario and make it seem natural
and believable. You had character development and Ada showed some
actual growth. You once more showed Laura to be a multidimensional
person. She has conflicting thoughts and desires. She is thoughtful
and devious. She is a real person.
Thinking about the stories without the sex component, I think I have
found another thing that makes them special. My thoughts are amorphous,
but I'll try to put them down. Your stories are so good because they
are focused on these women and their personalities and how they
interact. The sex flows from the women themselves. Another writer Ann
Douglas writes good stories I feel, and though her sex is good, it can't
come close to yours. But her stories are typical.
Stories seem to fall into two main categories. One is just he normal
sex stories with no plot and characters who are not real. Then you have
writers like Ann Douglas who set up good plots, but still something is
missing. Their stories concentrate on the plot. The characters are
good, but the don't breath. It is the story and not the characters that
drive the story. They seem like an LA Law episode. The characters are
just there to tell a story. They might make a great show, but the
characters never really "live".
The one thing that Laura does is "live". Her emotions are on her
sleeve. She is such a complex person. One of the things that I really
like about her is that she is not perfect. She is a person who has
faults like all people. You have allowed Laura to be a "real" person.
Another thing is that we see real interactions with her lovers. They
love, fight, reconcile and grow in their relationships.
3-9-01
After reading the last chapter again and reading the story from chapter
231, I wanted to mention two more reasons why I find your
stories so special.
First is the fact that Laura exults so in her lovers and the joy she
brings them. Other stories just don't show this. The women get excited
and show a lot of passion, but I just don't see the devotion that Laura
shows to her lovers. I also guess, I see a lot of myself in Laura in
this respect.
The second thing that makes this story so special is the fact that the
story is up to 247 chapters. The thing about the last chapter was the
two chapters before that featured Ada. Then the phone calls that were
in two other chapters. This allows for the reader to really get into
these characters. But, the person that it really allows us to get to
know and come to care for is Laura. It has been a real blast to come to
know Laura and all her ways and desires. I just love all the different
facets to her personality. She is the most real character I have found
in erotica. She seems real to me.
3-20-01
One thing that this chapter made me realizes is that I really like
Cecilia. I love her gentle easygoing nature. This also causes me to
really like Dawn and Shayla. I was instantly attracted to Dawn because
of her sweetness. When I reread the chapter with Shayla I was drawn to
her because of her gentleness. Now Cecilia. They are women who give of
themselves in an unselfish way, especially Dawn. She is special. These
women are like ports of calm from the stormy relationship Laura has with
many of her other lovers.
Having said that, I really, really enjoy the characters like Shontay.
These are the women who make this story kick. I love the above women,
but they would get boring if they were the main course. Like you said
about some people wanting Laura to settle down, "no way". This story
needs angst to make it breath. It is the tension with these women that
makes for such scorching sex. The sex with the above three is equally
hot, just in a different way.
I guess what I'm trying to say is that I like the variety. Your sex is sooooo
real. You make sex real by constantly varying it.
This chapter also reminded me of another reason your stories are so
special. Humor. I chuckled when Shontay bitched and whined. I laughed
out loud when Laura freaked over the Gibson's hearing her and Cecilia.
her paranoia was humorous. I can't remember laughing at any other story
in a long time. You usually make me smile and at least chuckle every
story or so.
3-29-01
You were right on target on the strap on use. You had a few nice
details I've not seen in other stories. Like describing how must
strap-ons ride the pubic bone and sometimes you do need to help guide Mr.
Dildo.
But it was the sex. Oh god. You, as usual, were right on target. You
describe the feelings that having a dildo used on you creates perfectly.
I loved how you talked about really ramming it home and grasping your
lover to bury it deep. I'm getting hot here just talking about it and
remembering the details of your story.
4-19-01
What really put it over the top was all the sweet emotion you put into their
strap-on fucking. Another thing you touched on was the power that fucking
like this gives one. It does make me feel more aggressive. The difference
between women and men seems to be what we do with that aggression.
Women use it to pleasure their partners. You captured how all three
women were concentrating on pleasuring their fuck mates. It was a perfect
marrying of sex and sweet bonding. Woo-Wee. Perfect.
I think Rhonda definitely inspired you. Rhonda showed the full range of emotions
in this story; cold, beguiling and vulnerable. I have always liked it
when you showed some weakness in Rhonda. It was nice to see her and Laura
seeming to bond. It was simply touching. I myself hate conflict. It
is fun to read, but is even nicer to maybe see something nice and sweet
developing. Also, the lecher in me sees visions of more scorching
threesomes.
I thought it cool how Yvette seemed to really want to make Rhonda and
Laura to grow beyond their pettiness. That was a nice touch.
One thing I have loved about your stories has been the sense of growth
in your characters. Of course, Laura has grown a ton. She started as
woman who had an affair with a woman and was rebelled, shocked. She
kept going back to men to prove her "straightness". Then over time, she
got more in tune with her true desires. Now she seems comfortable being
a lesbian. I guess I can forgive her occasional man from time to time.
Ugh. Sorry, just the lesbian in me.
But it has been with the "cold" women where I see this growth. Deshona,
Ada and Shontay have definitely grown because of their relationships
with Laura. She has allowed them to shed their anger, guilt and fear.
They have become stronger women because of Laura.
I have to give you credit. You do this in the contact of
erotica/pornography. Your story by its nature has to focus on sex.
still, you are able to bring real emotion and the subtle interplay of
complex relationships. This is just so hard within this genre. You are
unique. Others are content with just sex. You want and deliver more.
All I can say is bravo.
4-23-01
What draws me back is the emotions. In the beginning of the chapter, if
Laura had woken up and the simply commenced to make love with Shontay,
it would have been good but not scorching. It was Shontay's fear and
then Laura's tender caring for Shontay and greatly desiring to reassure
her and make her confidant that made the sex touching. With the 3-way,
if Laura had shown up at Rhonda's and they simply commenced to fucking,
again it would have been good, but not the divine episode it is. It is
all the growth of Laura and her "rival". It was the sweet emotions
between them. It was Laura being startled by the emotions she was
feeling. It was Rhonda showing her vulnerability and desire to become
closer to Laura. It was Yvette helping throughout to help her two
bedmates to get past their pettiness. This is not new, your stories are
filled with this. It is just so damm powerful because of your focusing
so much cleansing emotion countering emotions that have been building
and festering for years. Wow.
4-26-01
Well, I've had a chance to read your most recent missive again. It has
been enjoyable reading it for the third time. As usual, it has more
than just scorching sex in it. As you know, I dearly love your sex
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