Rogue Review No. 47 - June 9, 1998 by Lee Vine The Swing Man by Chili Peeler M/F, F/F, M/F/F, Inc Length: 40,500 words ========== NOTES: (1) IF YOU ARE UNDER 18 THEN STOP READING NOW!!!!! (2) IF YOU ARE OFFENDED BY DESCRIPTIONS OF NATURAL ACTS WHICH SOME PEOPLE CALL PLEASUREABLE BUT YOU REGARD AS NECESSARY FOR THE PERPETUATION OF THE HUMAN RACE THEN STOP READING NOW!!!!!!! (3) IF YOU AREN'T SURE IF EITHER (1) OR (2) APPLY TO YOU THEN STOP READING NOW!!!! ========== Summary Jonas has been cheating on his wife, Stella. She finds out. She calls her lawyer and instructs him to start divorce proceedings. Jonas' daughter, Nikki, has a slightly different reaction. Commentary This story tried to do too much. It started in one direction and ended in another. In some cases this works. In this one it did not. The author did not do a good job of bringing the husband-cheating-on- his-wife and father-sleeping-with-his-daughter plot lines together. There was a bit too much sex, for my tastes. A little more plot and characterization would have done wonders for this story. Toward the end the plot and characters began to disintegrate and all that was left was a stroke story. Possibly if the author had not spent so much time describing sex and left a little more to the reader's imagination this story would have worked better. Judgment This was not a good story. I can see the various plot lines working in individual stories, but not in a single one.