Rogue Review  No. 60 - June 18, 1998

Roommates by Munawaruddin Ali

M/F/F

Length: 3,200 words

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DISCLAIMER:

(1)  IF YOU ARE UNDER 18 THEN STOP READING NOW!!!!!
(2)  IF YOU ARE OFFENDED BY DESCRIPTIONS OF NATURAL ACTS WHICH SOME 
PEOPLE CALL PLEASUREABLE BUT YOU REGARD AS NECESSARY FOR THE 
PERPETUATION OF THE HUMAN RACE THEN STOP READING NOW!!!!!!!
(3)  IF YOU AREN'T SURE IF EITHER (1) OR (2) APPLY TO YOU THEN STOP 
READING NOW!!!!

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Summary

Anthony loses his virginity to his two beautiful roommates after a 
few hands of poker.


Commentary

I have seen this plot before.  The characters are transparent.  This 
is a shell of a story.  It needs to be edited and rewritten.

Occasionally this story got so pathetic it was funny.

Plots come and go.  An author should try to inject some of herself 
into what she is writing.  With the exception of the pathetic parts, 
this story felt unoriginal.


Judgment

This was not a good story, but there were a few chuckles in it.


Link(s)

http://www.qz.to/erotica/assm/Year98/11865.txt