Rogue Review No. 249 - November 2, 1998

Orange County Babylon (Part 6 of 8) by MichaelD38

M/F, F/F, Teen

Length: 8,400 words

Rating: -


  NOTICE

If you are easily offended or under the age of eighteen then please 
do not read what follows.


  SUMMARY

Jack break up with Summer.  The football team wins the championship.


  COMMENTARY

Like the previous five parts, this part is well written.  Two things 
do occur to me.

One, there is a lot of football in this story.  I like football and 
can appreciate what is being described.  I can imagine that someone 
who does not care for football might skip over some of the lengthy 
descriptions of games.

Two, things have been going just a bit too sweetly, lately.  I am 
waiting for the ball to drop.  If it does not I will probably be some
what disappointed.


  LINKS

http://www.qz.to/erotica/assm/Year98/14970.txt [1/3]
http://www.qz.to/erotica/assm/Year98/14972.txt [2/3]
http://www.qz.to/erotica/assm/Year98/14971.txt [3/3]

http://search.dejanews.com/getdoc.xp?AN=387427320&fmt=raw [1/3]
http://search.dejanews.com/getdoc.xp?AN=387427333&fmt=raw [2/3]
http://search.dejanews.com/getdoc.xp?AN=387427328&fmt=raw [3/3]