Rogue Review No. 362 - April 27, 1999

Pretend by Al Steiner (Plot supplied by Rob)

M/F

Length: 8,800 words

Objective Analysis: 8.0 (out of 10)

  Arousal: 4/5
  Plot and Characters: 4/5
  Editing: 4/5

Subjective Analysis: Very Good


  NOTICE

If you are easily offended, not of the required legal age, or 
material of an erotic nature is illegal where you are, then do not
read what follows.


  SUMMARY

Paul helps Kathy, his flirtatious employee, out of a bad situation by
pretending to be her boyfriend.


  COMMENTARY

This is a very arousing story.  The fact that both characters are 
married, but not to each other, and are initially placed in a 
situation where they need to act like lovers, made for a very 
arousing story.

This is a well conceived story.  The transition from the first part 
to the second could have been a bit smoother.  There was a definite 
shift in mood or the narrator's attitude toward their situation.  The
characters seem realistic, as does the dialogue.  This is not a very 
deep story, but there is more to it than just sex.  There are a few 
typos.

I enjoyed this story.  It well written, very arousing, and reasonably
well edited.  I think I might have enjoyed this story a bit more if 
the author had managed to preserve the tone he had going in the first
half.  I have given this story a Very Good, under Subjective 
Analysis.


  LINKS

Pretend

* http://search.dejanews.com/=gh/getdoc.xp?AN=470026169&fmt=raw [1/2]
* http://search.dejanews.com/=gh/getdoc.xp?AN=470027263&fmt=raw [2/2]