Rogue Review No. 372 - May 16, 1999

At Home Dares by Maria Gonzales

Code(s): F/M, F/F

Theme(s): Teenagers; Exhibitionism; Voyeurism; Blackmail

Length: 24,900 words

Objective Analysis: 8.0 (out of 10)

  Arousal: 4/5
  Plot and Characters: 3/5
  Editing: 5/5

Subjective Analysis: Excellent


  NOTICE

If you are easily offended, not of the required legal age, or 
material of an erotic nature is illegal where you are, then do 
not read what follows.


  SUMMARY

Lisa gets blackmailed by Adam, her classmate and neighbor.  First
he makes her pose for nude pictures and then he expects her to be
his girlfriend.


  COMMENTARY

This story is very arousing.  At times Lisa seems to be in 
control of Adam, and at others he seems to be the one calling the
shots.  That, coupled with the exhibitionist and voyeur elements 
are what made the story enjoyable and arousing, for the most 
part.

This story is well enough written, but I had some problems with 
it.  I wasn't terribly impressed with the plot.  It was too 
quickly paced.  Everything flowed too smoothly.  Through the 
first four chapters, the character development was realistic 
enough, but in the last two chapters the momentum of the story 
got turned around.  It seemed like the author changed her mind 
about how she wanted the story to end.  The ending was too 
facile.

I enjoyed this story quite a bit.  In its favor it is very 
arousing and well enough written.  Strikes against it are a 
perceived lack of consistency in the transition from the first 
four chapters to the last two, and the fact that the plot flows 
too quickly.  I was a bit disturbed by the blackmail scenario, 
but I enjoyed this story enough that I am willing to ignore the 
problems I had with it and give it an Excellent.


  LINKS

At Home Dares

* http://members.aol.com/Maria1971/dares.txt