Rogue Review No. 468 - November 22, 1999

NOTICE: If you are easily offended, not of the 
required legal age, or material of an erotic nature 
is illegal where you are, then do not read what 
follows.

TITLE: The Shit-Eating Grin
AUTHOR: Losgud
LENGTH: 8,800 words
MAIN CHARACTER: Female
COMBINATION(S): Twosome (2 Females)
                Threesome (2 Females, 1 Male)
ORIENTATION(S): Heterosexual (Female, Male)
                Homosexual (Female)
RELATIONSHIP(S): Siblings
KINK(S): --
SETTING(S): Home
GENRE(S): --
CAUTION(S): --

SUMMARY: Brenda flies home to visit her family, after her 
father has a stroke.  It turns out she has to share a room 
with Sarah, her older sister, whom she has never gotten 
along with very well.  Much to Brenda's surprise, this 
actually mellows the situation somewhat.  Before you know it 
Sarah and Barry, her older brother, don't seem all that bad 
after all.

COMMENTARY: This is an arousing tale of a rather interesting 
family.  I enjoyed the twists and turns that story takes.  
The author does a very nice job working in little details.  
They inject both humor and reality into Brenda's situation.

One problem that I do have with this story is the title.  
The author manages to work it into the plot, but it felt 
forced.  It seemed peripheral and not central to the story.

I also would have preferred a little more dialogue and a 
little less narration.  Actually, the author does a very 
nice job with the narration.  What really bothered me was 
that I felt like I didn't know Barry or Sarah, except 
through Brenda's eyes.  So, maybe the problem isn't that 
there is too much narration, but that Brenda seems too in 
control of the situation.  Nothing seems to leap out and 
surprise her.  Well, that isn't completely true, but without 
giving away what happens I must say that her reactions seem 
rather subdued.

Enough already!  This is a very nicely written story.  I'm 
just being picky.  If you like stories that have more to 
them than just sex, and that includes stories of incest, 
then you should like this one.

OBJECTIVE ANALYSIS: 9.0 (out of 10)

        - Arousal: 4/5
        - Editing: 5/5
        - Plot and Characters: 5/5

SUBJECTIVE ANALYSIS: Very Good

LINK(S): The Shit Eating Grin

         - http://www.deja.com/=gh/getdoc.xp?AN=497927228&fmt=raw&part=1

         Stories Online

         - http://www.storiesonline.net/