Rogue Review No. 470 - November 30, 1999

NOTICE: If you are easily offended, not of the 
required legal age, or material of an erotic nature 
is illegal where you are, then do not read what 
follows.

TITLE: The Girl Who Came Out of the Blue
AUTHOR: Titmouse
LENGTH: 15,000 words
MAIN CHARACTER: Male
COMBINATION(S): Twosome (Female, Male)
ORIENTATION(S): Heterosexual (Female, Male)
RELATIONSHIP(S): Older Man-Younger Woman
KINK(S): Light Bondage
SETTING(S): Hotel
GENRE(S): --
CAUTION(S): --

SUMMARY: 55-year-old Alan helps 22-year-old Linda reduce her 
purity score.

COMMENTARY: Well, the sex in this story is over the top.  It 
really got me going, even before it actually began.  The 
foreshadowing was titillating, to say the least.  
Unfortunately, the story is taken up, for the most part, by 
a single sexual encounter.  So while on the one hand, this 
sexual encounter was enough to steam up my glasses, on the 
other, the plot left something to be desired.

Actually the way the story begins led me to believe that 
there would be more to it than just sex.  In a way, there 
is; after all, the author does take the time to set the 
stage.  There is a buildup.  I was drawn in enough by the 
setup and the hints of what was to come (i.e. the sex) that 
I was a little more forgiving, for a while.  If the story 
had been shorter then maybe I could have been a little more 
generous and given this story an even higher score, but 
considering its length, I think that there needs to be more 
to the plot to justify stretching out the narrative to its 
current length.

OBJECTIVE ANALYSIS: 8.0 (out of 10)

        - Arousal: 4/5
        - Editing: 5/5
        - Plot and Characters: 3/5

SUBJECTIVE ANALYSIS: Very Good

LINK(S): The Girl Who Came Out of the Blue

         - http://assm.asstr.org/Year1999/20951

         - http://www.deja.com/=gh/getdoc.xp?AN=547051021&fmt=raw 

         Stories by the Titmouse

         - http://www.asstr.org/~Titmouse/