Rogue Review No. 471 - December 3, 1999
NOTICE: If you are easily offended, not of the
required legal age, or material of an erotic nature
is illegal where you are, then do not read what
follows.
TITLE: Teacher's Pets.com
AUTHOR: Lotuseater
LENGTH: 2,500 words
MAIN CHARACTER: Female
COMBINATION(S): Twosome (2 Females)
ORIENTATION(S): Homosexual (Female)
RELATIONSHIP(S): Roommates
KINK(S): Exhibitionism
SETTING(S): Dormitory
GENRE(S): --
CAUTION(S): --
SUMMARY: Jennifer's parents don't have enough money for her
to continue living in a dormitory, while she attends
college. Karen, Jennifer's roommate, comes up with a scheme
which, hopefully, will earn them enough money so that they
can continue living together.
COMMENTARY: This is a fun story; very playful. I like the
manner in which the author sets it up and then carries
through on it. It is very nicely paced. It isn't
overloaded with sex. It would have been nice if the author
had taken a little more time to flesh out the characters.
The characteristics that distinguish them seem to have
little to do with their personalities and more to do with
their physical attributes or financial positions. In other
words, the plot and pacing impressed me, the characters did
not.
Getting away from the plot and characters, there are some
spots where a few more details would have helped. I like it
when an author gives me enough to visualize the scene, but
not so much that I feel like every last detail has been
written in to it. More often than not, when I perceive a
problem with the quantity of details, the author falls into
the latter category. In this case there is actually a
detectable dearth of description. This meant I had to make
some more imaginative leaps than I prefer to, and although
this was not an insurmountable task, it bothered me enough
that I decided to mention it.
OBJECTIVE ANALYSIS: 7.5 (out of 10)
- Arousal: 3/5
- Editing: 5/5
- Plot and Characters: 4/5
SUBJECTIVE ANALYSIS: Good
LINK(S): Teacher's Pets.com
- http://assm.asstr.org/Year1999/21588
- http://www.deja.com/=gh/getdoc.xp?AN=555108632&fmt=raw